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Tracy Stinson's avatar

I could really feel the emotion and connection between Denric, Tasmin, and Becca. It increased the tension and sadness of Tasmin’s departure . Now I am in suspense wondering what important thing Tasmin forgot in her rush to get out! I’m looking forward to the next episode!

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Susan Beneville's avatar

I don't think she's left Red Crag and her family often. And, if she fails, she can't come back.

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Leslie Starker's avatar

I went back and reread all the chapters before reading this one. What an exciting story! I'm already scared of the big woman with the poison blade🫣

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Susan Beneville's avatar

Thanks! Yeah, she's not a good person. But, Tamsin's not a fighter. Yet.

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Kelley Gibler's avatar

I was feeling anxious, and I couldn't for the life of me figure what was the matter. It was Tamsin! It was her upcoming journey. Even my heart was palpitating. I hate having to wait for the next installment. Patience may be a virtue but sure as hell isn't one of mine. Way to build the excitement. Wow!

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Susan Beneville's avatar

Thanks! Her journey is not an easy one. I think her heart is racing, too!

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Leslie Absher's avatar

I am rooting for Tamsin - of course. But I love all the characters. And the behind the scenes is illuminating, the way you have reserved for another time what Tamsin forgets to bring on her journey. You'll know when it gets revealed in the moment. Such spontaneous story making. Exciting to read!

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Susan Beneville's avatar

Thanks! I figured if I decided in the moment what she forgot then I might just avoid having her need that thing later. So, wait until she needs something and decide she doesn't have it because of the earlier failed roll.

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Leslie Absher's avatar

Makes good sense. Keep the story unfolding for you instead of reverting back to deciding everything. Seems a more interesting way to make a story. Injects the unknown.

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Troy Church's avatar

I wonder what she forgot? I like how you include the game behind the story section. Great stuff.

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